Void Domain Author’s Note 01
All of the following is completely optional to read. This is no narrative. It in no way affects the story. I’m mostly going to ramble for a few words.
And that’s that.
Book one closes.
Thanks for reading. I do hope you enjoyed, I certainly did.
Book two will continue as scheduled. No intermissions, no interludes. Tune in next time for 002.001.
My main goal with book one was simply to finish. And I’d say I did so. It is a coherent story, at least from my position. I do hope it was coherent for you as well.
For book two, I am going to try to give some limelight to other characters and develop some of them a little more. Eva might take a short backseat. We’ll see more non-Eva characters as POVs. Probably. Still hammering out some details though I have a few chapters written already. It is a little something of an experiment so I suppose we’ll see how that goes.
Book two will finish out the remainder of the school year and then on to book three where Eva will be the unquestionably main character once again. But that’s a ways off yet, so I won’t promise any details I might change later.
As for book one, it took a little while to get off the ground, I’d say. I can already see things that I would change were this not a web serial. The early chapters especially.
Chapter six, I do believe is the weakest chapter. Few things actually happen that progress much of anything. Devon is made to look like a buffoon a bit too much, though I may blame that on Eva handing him potions that don’t mix well. At least in my headcanon.
It wasn’t until after I finished the entire thing and started on book two that I realized Eva fell victim to the ‘main character runs off alone despite nefarious people being around and after her’ cliche. It seriously didn’t even register with me until just now. I’m going to claim that Weilks had her stalked by ghosts and they were purposely waiting for her to be alone. Maybe that will alleviate some of my worry.
I do like the end of the book, that is to say the last few chapters. In my original plan, Eva was simply to be captured by Sawyer. A capture she promptly escapes from in a manner similar to how she actually escaped. At some point, I realized that these big bad necromancers were treating her with kid gloves despite killing several people during the Halloween chapters.
Halfway through writing that chapter, I decided that had to go. This isn’t some story with ineffectual villains. Sawyer and Weilks are unrepentant murderers who kill for their own gain. They’re not going to just leave Eva in some cell somewhere.
So the Sawyer torture scene came about.
I had a table set out full of injuries. Some were very minor, such as Eva’s hair. Others were more severe than her eyes. The eyes was probably the worst along side a full limb being removed. In the end, I decided on her fingers and eyes. After I decided on torture being a thing, she was always going to lose her toes.
The removal of her eyes caused quite a few changes, though nothing too specific. I had already alluded to her being able to sense blood, so I didn’t think it was too big a jump for her to sense blood within people. I’m always nervous about ‘eleventh hour superpowers’ as I don’t think they’re done well too often, but I thought that might be a reasonable.
No more talk about her eyes, though. There will be more on that in book two.
Her hands being replaced with Arachne hands ended up being another thing I had slight reservations about. I don’t want to make light of those with actual injuries in real life, but it is hard to write a protagonist with no eyes, no hands, and no toes. Perhaps in the future as my writing improves, I’ll take a stab at a legitimately crippled character. For now, I needed to at least somewhat rectify her injuries. I do think the hands will come into–well, I’ll leave that talk for future books. Wouldn’t want to spoil much of anything.
Speaking about injuries and their causes, I almost had a villain chapter. Sawyer and Weilks were mostly going to talk about their plans and how they were going to accomplish them. I ended up scrapping it only a few hundred words in. Rest assured, there were plans there and they would have succeeded had they not been disrupted.
There’s probably more I can talk about, but I think I will stop it here for now. This isn’t supposed to be some long thing.
I will leave a bit of trivia about some things in the first book.
- Brakket Academy is so named because of my placeholders. When writing, I will type something like [Protagonist] if I haven’t come up with a name. [Academy] was the placeholder for Brakket. In my head, I called it Bracket Academy and decided to change the c to k.
- Eva was not the original protagonist. That honor went to Jordan. Juliana also did not exist in the original outline.
- All names of Brakket Academy staff are references to other works. The exceptions are Zoe Baxter, Wayne Lurcher, and Martina Turner. In the future, ‘main’ staff such as Zoe will have nonreferential names. I plan to continue referencing works I enjoy with nonessential staff.
- For example, Isaac Calvin and Franklin Kines are references to Isaac Asimov’s Robot series character Susan Calvin and Frank Herbert’s Dune’s Liet Kynes. Not all references are in this pattern. Some are far more obtuse than others. I dislike coming across super obvious references when reading, so I’ve made a lot of them very obscure. Good luck figuring out Nurse Naranga.
- These references are name only. Don’t expect the characters to act like the character or person they are referencing.
- Different characters refer to other characters in different ways. This is an absolute nightmare to keep straight between the multiple POVs. Eva, for instance, refers to characters how they introduced themselves to her. Peers tend to introduce themselves by first name only while those in higher standings, such as teachers, often introduce themselves by their full name.
- Several locations are based on real locations I’ve actually visited in real life. Brakket Academy, the abandoned hospital/retirement home at the start, and Eva’s prison are some of them. Quite a high number of states in the US have old, abandoned prisons. Most, if not all of these have been turned into walk through museums. Check around you and see if you’ve got one too. They’re fun to visit.
- Death is mentioned as a character more than once though He has yet to show up. While my Death may differ in personality and appearance, I highly recommend Terry Pratchett’s Discworld novels. Mort is one of my favorites and deals with Death a fair amount.
Stats:
Chapters: 28 (+two Extras)
Wordcount: 124,536 (according to WordPress’ built in word counter; including Extras)
POV counts (max of one count per chapter(including Extras)):
-Eva: 24
-Zoe: 6
-Juliana: 4
-Arachne: 4
-Devon: 2
-Wayne: 2
-Irene: 2
-Nel: 2
-Lynn: 1
-Shalise: 1
-Shelby: 1
That’s all, thanks for reading book one. I hope you enjoy book two. Click the tile below to return to the story.
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"Your grip has tightened since Halloween." "I heard you were staying in town for Christmas," Eva shrugged. "I went out to buy a stress ball straight away." Genoa Rivas barked out a laugh. "Good. Good." She released Eva's hand and clasped her own on the shoulder of her partner. With a light shove, the spindly man stumbled forwards. He managed to avoid crashing into Eva by inches. "This is my husband, Carlos." A spindly arm stretched out to Eva. "H-hello," he said in a high-pitched…-
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>their subsequent cleanup by the Elysium Sisters had simultaneously
>>frightened off and reassured the students.
If they were ‘frightened off’ then I assume that they are not here to be ‘reassured’. ‘frightened’ would work for me, but you might mean something else.
> She showed up at the start of the day, much to the surprise of
>>everyone except Zoe and Juliana. Eva had been hiding out inside the dorm
> since she showed up the day after.
What’s the relationship between ‘at the start of the day’ and ‘the day after’, during both of which ‘she showed up’?
> There was a brief talk of surprise
This implies that the talk was more significant than the actual surprise, which may not be what you mean. A ‘buzz’ of surprise would be both an action and a comment, so it would not jar in the same way.
> antimony oil
Antimony is a poisonous heavy metal in the same group as arsenic. Do you mean the action to be a safety emergency?
Sorry, those comments belong on 001.028.
Hey, I do the exact same thing when it comes to placeholder names! Nothing like having a jarring stop to flow like seeing big blocky symbols.
Okay, first book completed. I like your style and how it handles situations. Maybe it’s my preference, but I thank you for not making the necromancers some cartoon villains, which I hate when it has been established that said characters are actually evil.
I think that the general idea that a zombie bite is incurable depends on the fact that ritual magic and dark magic has been considered “evil” for a long time, and so it has fallen out of use if one didn’t want to be on the bad side of the Sisters.
All in all, I liked the first book, even the sixth chapter, since it was established that Eva is an unreliable narrator. Onwards!
Hi! I’ve decided to read Void Domain, and since reading it in the browser is not fun, I wrote this script to convert it to FB2. Requires Python 3.7 (earlier 3.x versions are not guaranteed to be compatible). Can be used by naive double-clicking if you’re a Windows user.
Feel free to use it (it’s AGPL).
Please disregard the post above – I forgot to remove some debugging code from the script. The fixed version is [removed, see below post]. If you are a moderator and are reading this, please delete the link in the previous post.
Done.
A-a-and I did it again. There was some code to skip the navigation nodes (Back | Index | Next), but it was too broad and ended up also removing author’s notes and really any paragraphs with non-default alignment (such as the Voice of the Void in chapter 25 of the first book).
I removed that. Now it doesn’t ignore paragraphs with attributes. Instead of that it later post-processes the element tree to remove navigation paragraphs and links with “>>” and “<<" in their names. Also, the text is now escaped when printing (before I made them gone, the aforementioned links broke XML markup due to lack of escaping).
Also, lists now use real bullet points and have correct line breaks. Sadly, FB2 does not support lists natively, so I had to be…creative… to get some indication that list items are nested. FB3 would have been better, since it has support for lists, but it's far too complex for me to create, and too new to be supported in most readers.
Here is the new code: https://pastecode.xyz/view/7b165107
As always, please hide/delete the link in my previous post (if someone wants to look at previous versions, they are still at pastecode and the links to them are there).
P.S. I've almost finished the first book. One thing I've noticed is that you seem to miss the fact that a lot of characters are children. Eva is 13, and I assume that her classmates are roughly the same. Therefore it's weird that you would sometimes describe one of them, e.g. Juliana, as "a woman" (if memory serves, that was the Halloween costume shopping scene).
Sorry it took so long, I was actually at a wedding over the past week. I could have still edited it, but just forgot after checking my email and only remembered just now. Removed the old link.
As for your P.S., yeah, that is a bit of a problem throughout the entire work. It has also been pointed out that they don’t often act their age in some circumstances. Though, at least in Eva’s case, a hard life does equal having to grow up faster.
That’s fine, it’s not like anything hinges on the old links being erased.
Here’s a small update: https://pastecode.xyz/view/220b3088
Fixes a few stupid errors that made the output files somewhat malformed (most reader software likely would have been able to read these malformed files just fine, but hyperlinks were broken).
do you have any recommendations for stories with similar a premise?
Will you be writing any more books, me and a large group of my friends love this!
Currently writing one called Vacant Throne over at http://tcthrone.wordpress.com/ 🙂
Your writing isn’t bad. I do feel that you portray Eva a bit too mature and waaay too strong. She’d supposed to be a 13 y/o kid with no “formal” training yet she’s taking on adult spellcasters, performing magic that her instructors say is impossible( curing Shal of becoming a zombie), and issuing challenges to these nuns who are supposed to undead hunting badasses? Suspension of disbelief is a thing but you stretch it pretty far. That said, the writing isn’t bad, and I’m enjoying the story as long as I choose to ignore certain facts about Eva. I’ll give the story more of a chance with the second book and see how it goes.
Is there plans for a new project, now this one is done?
I talk a little about that on the author’s notes for book 10. Short answer: There isn’t a plan for anything right away, but eventually I hope to do more.
The end was a little abrupt^^ I you want publish your novel one day you need to rewrite that,I think
Just wanted to give you my appreciation as a reader and maybe some extra motivation to keep writing.
Love your story!
Hopefully you will never stop improving your writing skills and continue creating great stories for the world
Hey thanks! I’m glad you’ve enjoyed!
Phew. Having a Dr. Halsey in a story with necromancers made me a bit worried.
This story is awesome. I really enjoy it. Thank you so much for writing it. Keep up the good work. The characters are interesting and engaging and the magic system is diverse. Again big fan.
The Story idea sounds good. Do you have an overall idea of how your story will pan out? Like, the main points and the ending?
From experience (though it’s mostly writing short stories and following 20+ novels at the same time, and at least 40 novels read completely), novels/serials which do not have a planned out basic story line, end up on hiatus (or dropped, eventually) or stretched out to the point it gets boring, Even if the story is really good and the author has an above-average command of English.
I have a very clear ending in mind and several points I need to hit to reach that ending, but a vast majority of the stuff in between is in flux. General ideas but nothing concrete yet. My outlines tend to get followed strictly for a few chapters before deviating to the point where I have to redo the outline. Plotting too far ahead would lead to madness, I feel.
Because of the web serial nature, I am planning for a lot of content. Or perhaps I have room for a lot of content. Most web novels that I have read tend to be quite long and I do enjoy having some meat to read rather than sit down for a few hours and blow through a measly 80-120k words.
I’ll likely accelerate into the ending to, at the very least, provide closure should things get out of hand in any of the ways you mentioned. The ending is something I could paint a picture of–if I could paint, that is–so I do not anticipate many problems in that department.
Thank goodness. Thank you for replying.
Now, onward to the serial!
When do you expect this to get wrapped up?
I’ve loved this story for years but I’ve always been shocked at how relatively unknown it is. Is there any chance you’ll try to publish it in the future? Also if you just wanted to get it out there more, uploading it chapter by chapter to royal road or another site would definitely draw some eyes.
No plans to publish it. Unfortunately, I think pretty much everything I’ve written is in need of some extremely heavy editing and/or rewriting that I don’t really have the time or desire to do. Which is also why I haven’t put it up on Royal Road. I released all my other stories on RR as I was writing them, so it feels different, but putting up something already finished with no editing just kind of feels bad. But I appreciate that you enjoy it! Anyone else who enjoys my other works might stumble across it and that’s good enough for me for now.